I checked out everyone's memoirs, and I have to say that I was very impressed. As a basis for other students, I will share a few that I think show progress and hard work. All of them are anonymous.
Example #1) The first time I saw him I got this feeling that was different from anything I ever felt. Although I was standing almost thirty feet from him, I'm sure he could see my hands trembling and hear my heart pounding. As I watched him stand at the back of the church with his family, I wondered what this new emotion could be. I took note of his clothes, his face, th way he walked, and I realized maybe this was love. I told my mom and she said I was too young, but for the last three years these feelings haven't subsided. Every time I see him, only once a week for a mere hour, the feelings start over and I wonder when will I be able to talk to him at least for a minute?
Example #2) Gazing down at the empty counter, I could feel extreme boredum settling in. A small line started to form in front of my register, so I had no choice but to help ring the customer up. Working at CVS has really put a damper on my mood, but I continued to work through my misery; four more hours left. Out of the corner of my eye, I spotted a cute guy with gorgeous red hair walk through the massive doors, and I couldn't help but stare.
Example #3) I looked back to where I used to live; my home, my life, was about to be left behind. I smiled gently letting out a heavy breath of relief, turned around, and got into my car. It was time to go; for good.
All of these examples are touching, provide details, and follow the basic rules of a memoir. I suggest looking at other students' as well and seeing if your memoir is "up to par." Along with this, Wednesdays will be BLOG DAYS. Today, you will be blogging about how far along you are with your memoir and your reading. Remember, add some extras as well!
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